drunken haze

a drunken haze

 will only bring you happiness for a moment

a sober life

will leave you lonely

so make that drunken haze a drunken life

and it will bury that lonelyness   

Reviews

[Perfect Mistake]

Great work! the words go together good

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like it a lot. It flows nicely. The structure doesn't look like it would.
But, when you read it, it has a nice rhythm. I think its funny in an ironic
kind of way. A free spirit having the secret of life. I can imagine a really
uptight person that is an emotional wreck receiving this advice. lol.

[...]

Ohhhhhhhh, how I can relate to this point! Very nice.

[ Side note: Is there an extra "a" in the fifth line? ;] ]

[Sharkapillar]

I liked it for the most part, but it didn't really seem to flow. Not trying to be a b***h or anything. Nice job otherwise!
~Blessed Be~