the tide.

If I could,

I would bottle your words,

in the salt of the ocean's blues.

Delicately pressing,

the tide, over your body.

In liquid sequence; 

we dance upon the moon.

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Van Morrison painted a better picture than myself back in 1970 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6lFxGBB4UGU

There is nothing more intense,

we dance upon the moon.




If I was to pick music it would be MoonDance.

[J Todd Underhill]

So one must ask that if by dancing on the moon, you feel as if you control the tide? Interesting thought indeed. Well written for a brief poem.

[roy mccarthy]

beautiful poem,
short and sweet!

[nonno noo]

I enjoy this. It paints a nice picture with just a few words. Smart writing.

[Orlando Murcia]

Beautiful..

Short and to the point

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Very eloquently written. I appreciate the shortness and sweetness. Nice write.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Beautiful poem - love it .
Much spoken in these lines.

Chloe

[Clopo]

Nice poem. Very interesting.

[shoaib]

simply beautiful :)

[Alessander]

the title drew me in as i too have been on a "nautical" binge (not to be confused with naughty lol).

Very short, but effective - the word choice rolls smoothly then crashes, like a wave. I like the connection of the moon at the end. After all, the moon is responsible for the tide - it tugs the ocean.