Art; your body, your heart.

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Your body is a guitar, the bass, the DRUMS.

Your arms go for miles along your torso, 

a width created by myth, or the Gods.

You're a structure built by ancient Romans.

You're a mystery I've yet to explore.

I'm seeing the stretch of your shoulders,

the way they look in the shadow of the night,

i could draw you, you're so beautiful.

I'm no artist,

but the lines you've got have me tangled in their endearing composition.

Music plays.

I can't get you off of my brain.

I need your body to survive tonight.

A perfect symmetry ranges from your cheek bones, 

to your hazy green eyes.

The curvature of your spine leaves me at ease,

you can't bend, and you don't break so easily.

The anatomy of you is breathtaking.

I'm wandering through the depths of your framework;

a wanderlust.

Your body is graced by skin that is liquid and pristine. 

I want to see you in all your entirety.

Your eloquent fingers, connected to such lovely hands.

Strings of tactile perfection.

Through your faultless chest,  and the elegance of your clavicle, lies the most remarkable piece of art of I've seen:

Your heart.

Author's Note

I'm well aware of its cheesiness, but still. ha Any ideas on how to give this more depth would be amazinggggg <3

Reviews

[TAO]

Cheesy? Exactly what is wrong with cheesy? More depth? Why do you need more depth? Is this not deep enough? It's like falling, reading this... It's...a pristine work of art, to say the least. The love you show in this work, the sheer...poetry... It's awe inspiring. Well written, well structured, and all around...cheesy... Very nice work, Ms.

[serpent]

hahah.. i thouroughly enjoyed intruments taking form of expressions and feelings...the methaphors used are really beautiful...very sensual and inspiringly artistic piece...!

[Brian Kraklau]

i love it lol. amazing write full of love. love is powerful

[200STM]

I like it cheesy is always welcome and your work is gourmet good work Candyosity!

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My-My-My this poem captivated me as sweet metaphorical love poem!!!
-but i love the last lines, they are just beautiful...you are a talented creative writer!!!

B/W

[Kelley]

Who needs depth this was awesome with just a hint of sensuality to it.
Great poem thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Last Night In Town]

I hate poetry, but I accidentally starting writing some, so I've been trying to read what other people call poetry. I've been unimpressed with the published stuff that i found, but this was actually really good, even though I especially hate 'cheesy' poetry. The cuteness doesn't take away from your talent.

[Megan E Twenter]

i like this alot :)

[Octob3r Star]

very nice :)

-Joshua

[Shane William]

If cheesiness is about getting to the sweet point, then I'll take it. Good write, keep up the penning.

[MiidniightSoul]

Aww this is such a beautiful and sweet poem. The last line was my favorite. You use descriptive words, making the pome come alive. Excellent.