Tears of Sorrow

Everyone has a secret or did something they regret in life.

I look out my window
And stare at the beautiful blue sky
This day was filled with sorrow
And i couldn't understand why

I wish i could go back in time
And fix everything
All of it happened so quickly
And the fault was all mine

So now I'm sitting here
with so many things going through my mind
All i can do is shed a river of tears
Because these secrets of mine will never unwind

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Florence]

This poem really catches my heart. I feel like it speaks my name, since I've gone through that "day filled with sorrow", and I also "wish I could go back in time and fix everything". I love the way this poem flows, it's very descriptive too. Outstanding work. :)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Wow. I definately love the flow of this poem! So good. And I can feel the sadness through as I read. Great write! =)

[akapr17other]

Making the lines the same length will improve the rhyming scheme you have here.

[Kat]

I can relate to this a lot i was fighting with my friend and that's exactly what happened i couldn't put it to pen and paper but you did nice job and i really mean it were friend again now but it just doesn't feel right things will never be the same depressing isn't it?

[lil lisa]

if u listen to dan...u mayy even want to put the stanza with the river in it in the beginning to start it off slow and then have it wind and flow faster. he thinks putting the river in the last line leaves the best impact so makes the imagery of the river strongest last but rivers usually build speed so start out with it. maybe.

[lil lisa]

ur voice is so strong for a girl with so few years. i remember being in someways like u. sometimes i read ur writings and actually forget ur still in highschool. this one makes total sense...and except for wanting more originality in ur title i wouldnt change a thing. "rushing from within" or "running river"...something a lil more mysterious is what id do.

[Coffee Vampier]

I love the was you wrote with the colors it brings an impact to the poem.
This reminded me of the day i wish i could redo

[Daniel88Batson]

Flows really well.
The rhyme is fantastic.
Maybe! On the last stanza bring that rhyming couplet together so switch 'with so many thing....mind', with all I can do...tears'. So it feels like those tears are getting closer together, sobbing faster and faster. Pure sorrow.
Even if you disagree it's fantastic! =D

[FugitiveBalloons]

I really like this poem and flows well. Nicely done.

[StarSandwich]

This is good, the poem flows well and I agree with florence :D outstanding :P

[Maya Storm]

This was so gentle
but full of emotions and meaning.
It is odd that the 'beautiful blue sky' can still have you feeling so much that you 'shed a river of tears'... makes you think.... Sometimes what's inside is more real than what you see outside :)