Chocolate

Bitter sweet life

chocolates

Bitter linger in my mouth

it brings no joy nor happiness

Don't be fooled by others

It's not as sweet as it is

Isn't life like this too?

Bitter-sweet.

The ups and downs side.

happy against sad

sweet against bitter

care against indifference

cheerful against depressed

to others, it may seemed like

a bed of roses

full of happiness

cheeriness

but they don't see the big picture

oh, when the chocolate melts

the disappointment set in

fools. i would reply

i told you so.

nothing sweet last forever

It's pointless getting your

hopes up high,

just to let it get dashed again.

It's better to see chocolate

the way it is,

all sweet and bitter inside.

Reviews

[Crinkle°]

hey, I like your poetry. I like the bitter sweet perfume out of it.

[Blunt]

hey lixin!
I get your point by not revealing too much. I'm not sure what to do with that either :/ any tips? I haven't been writing much poems either, been busy too. Sure, I will visit.

[Lixin]

Oh and do visit my site at http://paintjack.blogspot.com
All constructive comments welcome.
And sorry I haven't been commenting on yours! Been really busy.

[Lixin]

You made some errors here and there, please check.
Not your best, you are still revealing too much. I really don't know how to explain to you what I mean when I say that. There's just this thing about your poems. It's not exactly a bad thing but if it's too much, readers may get bored.

And I think this poem can be better if you shorten it, or use more literary devices.