Lessons Learned

Lessons Learned Treasure them! If you don't, you will not learn... Written April, 2003 (4 years ago)

Our lives have had great mountains and hills

We've taken our share of spills and thrills

God's given US little lives to share

To hold, to love and always to care

To give them rules - watch them break them

To give them help - let them take it

To teach them patience, although we have none

To make examples of our mistakes, fun

To love, to care, to give and dare

To look into their innocent eyes

To watch and learn from them, surprise!

Our goal is to give

The best life we can live

And when we grow old

And when they get bold

We can sit back with wonder and tears

How our lives have affected theirs

How the love we gave them, shows

In everyway, as their own kids grow

Author's Note

This is an amature writers words in communicating to her companion (at the time) about the importance she felt in the lives they held...
Bear in mind - if you would please - this is prior to learning a bit more of writing styles and utilization of words. I now know... this was an awesome step (lesson learned, if you would) in developing as a writer.

Thank you for your patience and honesty.

Reviews

[Chris Zahar]

It has a very simple but, at the same time, very catch and vivid rhythm. Again, I think we differ quite a bit as writers, but I certainly enjoyed your work. The message has been stated by many other writers before you, but, at the same time, it's a very valuable and certainly accurate picture of human life.

[JC]

Never regret anything that comes from the heart, its the most pure of anything you have to give. We all grow as we expand our wings, but in time you find that you come to appreciate from where you began.

This was a great expression of the gift of a child, and what it is to be a parent. I enjoyed it very much.

JC

[REALIZE]

This was simplistic yet it said so much without needing a whole lot. I wouldn't call this amature either, I understand it wholeheartedly. Its like a guide to how you want the best for your children as well as you want them to expierience there own trials. The steps the lessons and everything that comes with knowing life.

Good write in my eyes

[No One Important]

With greater understanding comes greater ignorance...your words are good they flow like fine wine and are paced excellently...I enjoyed it a lot!!

[__Flaw__]

Well, nothing amateurish or as such about this piece...To me, it was a simple approach, an honest one, in conveying a very healthy message to the society, to the people, to any individual...you don't only live in your present, but you also have a role to play in your future...and this poem tells us exactly that :)))

Very well done...Cheers :))))

[Kitty]

Amature or not, this is a brilliant piece. I love the flow, the words you chose. And its meaning is a deep one (well to me anyway). There's a song by Crosby, Stills, Nash & Young called Teach Your Children. This poem made me think of that song. I cry through that song every time, and I had tears in my eyes reading your poem.

Josie

[thecoolone52]

it was good.. i liked your note... i think anytime you write something you can learn how to tweak yourself in a certain way... how you can make it better or how you can just totally mess it up without realizing it hahaha... i really liked this piece though and the green font is very stylish

[SM Davis]

I don't think this reads as an amateur write. i think this reads as an honest reflection from one's point of view. I think actually this is one of your best. When a writer becomes more concerned about the method than the words, something becomes lost. A true writer is a writer from passion....not mechanics. Mechanics come...passion can never be learned.

I enjoyed this one the most of all your writings.

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It gripped my heart. Literally, my chest is a little tight now. Great ending! The rhythm was fabulous. "spills and thrills" - my fav. It was fun, but heartfelt and clever. Dont worry about the vocab; simpler language only makes it available to a wider audience. And it just works in this piece. Well done!

[a Messenger]

I loved this piece. If it was just a step in your growth, then your growth must be amazing.
This is insightful, rhythmic and beautiful.
Thank you for sharing it.