Uninhibited and unscriptied...
Relax and enjoy - sink into a comfortable old chair and recall a time when life had a meaning as powerful as love... eternity - eternally - equivalent
Two Equals We
Living inside each other, we know what we feel.
Passions… majestic… creation, feels so surreal.
Soar to new heights, a beautiful Mountain View.
Every moment given to us, we discover something new.
Hand in hand embraces, deeply emotions grow.
No words left unspoken, each other WE do know.
We've been given the gift of one, an equivalent of two.
As once - a million times spoken, I am you.
Attempt to dust away, the residual effect.
Set aside the consequences, this now - we'll neglect.
Word searching warriors, we are spiritual no doubt.
Hand to heart, with these words we will never be without.
Climb that hill; we'll see the massive valley below.
Fate has brought us to this point, like ink on paper - flow.
We live in today, moving forward to forever.
Love; it grows of magnitude, until the 'twelfth of never'.
Almost... Maybe I was caught up absorbing the rythym of the words. I loved the first four lines, waited to feel the beat again and didn't, but was compensated with the flourishing brush stroke of the clever last one, '...until the twelfth of never.'
Nice work.
I really like the word choice and imagery in this. I particularly like the third stanza. Two lovers with the same soul... this captures that concept perfectly. The fact that the love grows and they learn new things from each other is an interesting twist. Personally, I thought that was an interesting message; the external world feeds the soul.
Wow, that was great. ^^ The rhyming, the tone, the simple style, everything was pretty much perfect! Keep up the phenomenal work. :) Thanks for sharing this.
It took me somewhere. maybe if I had one as you describe. Another soul to be one with, it surely would. I love your work. I hope you give us more instead of teasing us with only 3....
Attempt to dust away, the residual effect.
Set aside the consequences, this now - we'll neglect.
Word searching warriors, we are spiritual no doubt.
Hand to heart, with these words we will never be without"
One can only pray, and one can only respond... Yes! you took me there, that is without a doubt. You have such an obvious and artistic talent with your words, you have me in awe.
"Hand in hand embraces, deeply emotions grow." that my friend, is simply beautiful.
I also love your ending line "Love; it grows of magnitude, until the 'twelfth of never'." that is very clever.
You are a great writer, but you don't need me to tell you that.