Fallen To The Darkness

 

 

Reminiscing about the things of old,

Not worrying about anything left untold,

Days passed left long forgotten,

Lives withered twisted and rotten,

Come to terms with your own lifeless soul,

Life untested takes its toll,

Come to me my minions of darkness,

Pretend to me the things are fresh,

Time to let all things fail,

And let the world pass to no avail,

Please don't beg or plead,

Just let all you're expressions of dark be freed,

Just remember I'm one of a kind,

never fail to take into mind,

This life so pained without guilt,

A shattered sphere is all I've built,

To the darkness I shall always fall,

To injury of blood I shall always call,

Don’t tempt me with the game,

Or be it to you you'll be the blame,

Fallen to the darkness

 

Reviews

[xX-tito24-Xx]

Well, after reading the poem about your teacher, I must say that I AM impressed with your improvement!

This poem, as others have said, flows well and has a great rhythm, with a pretty good rhyme scheme to top things off. As I said in the previous review that I had given you though, you need to add some more punctuation, it'll help the poem flow more easily than it already does.

One other thing, I LOVE the entire theme of the poem! The feeling of just letting yourself go and allowing yourself to fail is one that most people can understand, because there comes a time when you are just too tired to keep on struggling, especially in this world, where everyone seems so apathetic and unwilling to do anything to improve the world.

[DarkAngelWriter]

This was calm, contradicting the seriousness of the words. I read it easily and the words went well together. Great flow and rhyme; it didn't sound forced. I love it.

[Kirsty Lee]

It seems the feelings in these poem are void of patience.
Your words create a story of pain, need, and hunger for something to feel.
Very chilling and wonderful diction. I enjoyed this immensely.