El Precio de tu Desprecio

El Precio de tu Desprecio

A Poem by camilion

Te dí mi ultímo abrazo,
Un abrazo vacío.
Te queria dar mi ultímo beso,
Un beso perdido.
Deseando retrasar el tiempo
Para volver a estar encantado,
Pero como se justifica ahora
Que has ignorado a un buen amigo?

Más que despecho es desilusíon
De que ni mi amistad
Ni mi cariño
Fueron suficiento para rescatar esta relación.

El precio de tu desprecio
Es un jamas cierto,
Un corazón inquieto,
Un sueño deshecho.

Y el teléfono nunca sonó
Y los mensajes de texto nunca vinieron
Evitando el impulso de llamarte
De rendirme a tus pies
Ignorando tu desprecio

El precio de tu desprecio
Fue un lento despecho
Una locura frenetíca
Un vacío eterno.

Ahora nado contra lo corriente,
Comenzando de cero
Borrando las lindas memorias de los buenos tiempos
Sabiendo bien que nunca lograre hacerlo,
pagando el precio de tu desprecio.

© 2012 camilion


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This is a beautiful poem! The title fits even though it is a line from the poem itself (which many contemporary poets will tell us is not a good thing). I differ from sweeping opinions, however, and I feel this is a good title.
I love how you've repeated "hug" and "kiss" to deepen the feel of emptiness and loss. For most the the poem I can't think of "improvement" suggestions, but the first stanza, I feel, could to a little neater, a little trimmer and have more power if you considered something like:

I gave you my last hug,
An empty hug.
I wanted to give you my last kiss,
a lost kiss.

Wishing to delay time,
be enchanted again,
but how do I justify
that you have ignored a good friend?

Posted 4 Years Ago



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Added on September 8, 2012
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Tags: Amor, Romanticos, Español

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camilion
camilion

Seattle, WA



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I write insanely to remain sane. It's my creative avenue, the one I like to stroll down the most. I don't know very much about structure or whether I'm doing it "right" or not. I just write what I fee.. more..

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A Poem by camilion