wherein biology foils natureboy

This year I swam in the river in mid-may,

ashley was there,

sensibly on the bank,

thecurrent flushed with runoff

where I swam in snowflakes,

future and past,

and drip dried shivering in the sun.

 

We kissed and I pretended I was

a cold blooded lizard and she was

suncharged sandstone.

we looked for morels

and in the alder thickets

I felt spiderweb's

breaking on my bare chest.

 

An intact webb foretells solitude,

induces thoughts of its maker

then congratulates you

for being there first

by sticking in your hair.

 

The new grass looked inviting

and we would have made love

and looked for spiders

but ashley is light skinned,

serious and shy under the sun,

and I forgot the condoms anyway.

Reviews

[DavidRyan]

Wonderful, man. Your attention to detail and the way your writing bounces from on subject to another but still keeps the main point in the forefront is astounding. The only thing I would change is a minor thing : You forgot to put a space between "the current" in line four. Other than that, strong, a beautiful, quick, humorous story that is flirting with pure brilliance. Dug it a lot in other words. Great title, too.

[Emily B]

boy, you've got the Hedra Helix stamp of approval. . . that goes a long way in this neck of the woods. It's gorgeous and bright and philosophical. Seems to me the river is an old friend. Figures prominently in your work.

[Hedra Helix]

that's frikking gorgeous.