(taking ideas)

     "Why?" I’ve asked myself that question for too many years. "Why, why did I answer that call?" That is what started everything to roll downhill. Tristan Luciano. I’ll never forget what he told me. ‘It’s your decision, Agent Crane, will you risk your life for your daughter’s or take the chance to finally kill me. I’ll be at the corner of Elena and 1^{st, your daughter is hanging one hundred feet above Jay Street. You have one hour.’}

I chose to end his reign of murder. My daughter died. The funeral was a few weeks later. I should have called backup, but had to be the big hero and get all the credit for killing him. Damnit, if I had only called backup my daughter would be graduating high school right now. Well enough about the past right now, my name is Ivan Crane III and I’ve lived in Bradford, West Virginia for thirty years, and I work as an undercover agent for the FBI.

Reviews

[ShaneBerry]

i liked it, but i do not see what you could do with it, but isn't that the point of a mystery story lol!

[Kevin]

Great start, grabs my attention. I would love to read more.

[Dupree]

This is a good start. Interesting to be sure but it all depends on where you go with it. Can't wait to read more.

[ettorney]

Interesting start. Not sure where you are going with it but it could be interesting.

[Taylor H.]

Great job