No More Tears

I really hope you like what i have wrote for you all! Please comment.

My life is a prison because im trapped in it,

Im hack init,

But i dont see me last in it,

Half of it is brought down by all the memories,

But the other half of it is explained in melodies,

Im telling these feelings, its what im used to,

Ive done it from getting beat up and abused too,

My farther being the reason for my first loose tooth,

Dont believe ive had a rough time well here's the true truth,

I grew up as a lonely child on everything i could,

Waited for my mother and farther to say im loved,

I tried my very hardest and i tried to be so good,

They never said it in the end i always though they would.

I always wonderd what i did so wrong for them to hate me,

The way the'd beat me and treat me daily,

Maybe i never turned out how they wanted to make me,

Or like they said they never planned for this baby,

No more fighting, No more fears, no more crying, no more tears,

No more fighting, No more fears, no more crying, no more tears,

It all burnt down in a town where i was raised up,

being told that i should just hate love,

There aint enough love to hate on anyway,

But i love to hate my parents because they feel the same way,

I pray that one day they'll realize what they've lost,

And even though im not religous i still where a cross,

I still believe that theres someone watching over me,

Watching over me making the path that is not in front of me,

And isnt it funny when you feel your at your greatest,

Someone always comes destroys is and degrades it,

Breaks it,

Split your hopes up into two,

You've lost your confidence and now your coping with it to,

Its true,

Its happend to us all,

The only difference is,

the hardness of the fall,

its your call...

No more fighting, No more fears, no more crying, no more tears,

No more fighting, No more fears, no more crying, no more tears,

Author's Note

I'd like to thank you for reading this. Its not true.. Its just lyrics.

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Well, that sounded true. So it must be good! Thanks for putting your poetic persona in the shoes of another's unhappy experience and make it a meaningful poem/song. Thanks for sharing.

[BCBates]

Pretty deep.
It flows well., and has a good meaning.
Try including 2+ rhymes per bar.
e.g.
It all burnt DOWN in a TOWN where i was raised UP/
Everyone AROUND saying i should just hate LOVE/

Just a thought :)

[Callum Mcleavy]

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