Her Love

Written recently about someone whom I care for very much. The picture is an illustration I had made for it.

 her love grew deep within her 

like a flower from her chest
the roots dug into flesh and bone
the petals bloomed like none the rest
and when a steady hand had strolled along
to pluck it from the dirt
the scar remained for months to come
an ugly mark beneath her shirt
but the roots from what was once alive
remained within her heart
a stubborn growth that never died
a loyal passion from the start

Author's Note

I haven't added any punctuation to it.
I often don't with poetry because I like the reader
to interpret it the way they wish.
Plus it makes the work look very clean.
This one might need it though.

Reviews

[Crazy Cat Man]

true and dangerous love. a great piece :)

[Sorry Infamous]

I often write without punctuation as well. I find that it makes the flow of words choppy. I think they way you broke up the sentences worked just as well if not better then a comma or a period would. The structure is also pleasing to the eye. I enjoyed reading this, it's an interesting look at a broken heart. Sometimes poems should be short and sweet, I feel like this one has room for more.

[Alejandro Espinoza]

Some poetry works without punctuation, but I think this needs it. I think the way you worded some of your thoughts could have been more thoroughly developed. I want to get a better sense of what your're saying - to be able to grasp the opinion instead of just having it read to me.

Put that in your pipe and smoke it, sister.

[prettyzombiegirl]

I really like that it doesn't have punctuation. It gives it style. Very good darling. Keep writing.

[curley]

Very nice. It really creates an image. Leave it without punctuation, it's better that way. Thanks for sharing! God Bless.

[J. Anthony Guerrero]

I like this, i would keep it without punctuation, its very good, and i really enjoyed it. Welcome to the Cafe!

[Wolfwind Words]

This reminded me of the love one might have for a respected elder who was inflicted by cancer but kept on fighting thru to the end!
Great job here!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Very nice metaphor, love growing deep roots, growing, blooming then plucked and scared. A cycle that continues in love. With tlc it can be nurtured and bloom season after season. Good work.

[empty glances]

You manage to pull off the rhyming without making it sound forced and without detracting from the flow of the piece. A pretty and lyrical poem, nice work.

[Kevin Andros]

Though you have not put any punctuation into it, it still looks very clean! Ordinarily, I advise not to write without punctuation as it is very important and one can often misunderstand your words. But I find that that is not the case here. You have delivered your idea very cleanly and carefully. I noticed that you haven't used capitalization in the beginning of the sentenses as well! I find it quite unorthodox, but it is very effective in this case.

Coming to the theme of the poem, you have managed to describe the blooming of the flower "love" from her heart and the effects it created when someone plucked it right out. The words like "Roots", "Dirt" really did the trick. The scars you have explained that is I think a heartbreak. A superbly written Poem, though I would again say that I normally do not appreciate peices without puncutation marks, this peice you have here is an exception. And the way you have arranged your words to form a definitie shape is just awsome. You are damn creative my friend, and I would advise that you continue with your great work you are doing. Keep writing, ~KA~