so powerful

So powerful is the sun in my eyes

Shining brightly, into the sky

The ball of fire stays suspended in the sky

As if someone is holding it by a string 

The light shines down on my face for the last time 

For the clouds go red and the sky purple

The suns little sister comes out to shine the light on.

Author's Note

sooo this is a spur of the moment idea... idk if I like it but ill leave it up to you :)

Reviews

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

interesting little poem...you could improve on a few of the sentences though like
"Shining brightly, into the sky" unless you mean it's your eyes shining brightly into the sky...but i rather think you meant shining brightly IN the sky?
Great effort though! :)
keep writing

[Jesse N. Wall]

if your intentions were to amuse, then you succeeded. i'd spur more often
if i were you

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a nice little gem :)

[Sunflower 20]

i like the way you made the sky a family of stars and the moon, it gave it a nice cosy feeling. i think you could possibly add to it, maybe another stanza describing the night, or something like that.
but overall, nice job :)

[Lily Mae]

I like it allot. It's light and hopeful. Giving a sense that no matter what we are guided by the light of day or night:) x