Emotions Running Deep

I wrote this poem from an image in my head, not experience. I hope you enjoy it!

She lays in her bed,

Crying herself to sleep,

She was in total shock,

Emotions running deep.

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The boy who said he had loved her,

The boy who hugged her tight,

The boy who kissed her gently,

Was the source of her tears tonight.

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The boy who said “I’ll never hurt you”,

The boy who said “You’ll always be mine”,

The boy who promised to love her,

Finally pushed her off of cloud nine.

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The boy who said he’d always care about her,

The boy who said “We’ll never part”,

The boy who said “I’ll never lie to you”

Had broken her fragile heart.

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She got out of bed,

She couldn’t take it anymore,

She tore up her memories, 

And threw them to the floor.

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She ran through her room,

In an angry rage,

Picked up her photo album,

And ripped out every page.

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The roses that the boy had given her,

Sat beautifully in a vase, 

She flung them to the floor,

Without ever turning her face.

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There sat her little brown teddy bear,

The boy had given her for Valentines Day,

With every thought she was more furious,

And threw the littler teddy bear away.

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She laid in her bed,

To keep crying herself to sleep,

She was still in total shock,

Emotions running deep.

Author's Note

This is one of my first poems. Any ideas you could contribute to help me better my writing would be greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. The poem ran smoothly till the last line. I believe maybe cutting out "She was still in total shock" would make the ending more smooth. The poem was strong. I could feel the anger and disappointment. A very good poem.
Coyote

[Sujash I. Purna]

this is very touchy. Creates a very vivid imagery. A bit blunt yet a very talented writing. Keep it up!