Abortion

I totally diagree with abortion so i figured i'd write a poem expressing how i feel.

The blood pours from their body until not even a drop can be formed.  Grasping for a chance of survival, their mind goes black.  Losing all the memories they once knew.  Letting their soul travel on to a better place.  Their body left cold and unloved for everyone feared what they could have loved most: A CHILD.

Author's Note

How do you feel ?

Reviews

[Undone1]

The blood pours from their body until not even a drop can be formed. Grasping for a chance of survival, their mind goes black. Losing all the memories they once knew. Letting their soul travel on to a better place. Their body left cold and unloved for everyone feared what they could have loved most: A CHILD.

Suggestions:
Their is plural so use bodies, not body.
Same with mind. Use minds, not mind.
Same with soul. Use souls, not soul.
Again, their bodies.

Rework the final line to make it more powerful.

I do agree with your intent!

[Lala]

*tear* I thought it was really good, and sad. It really depicted abortion, and it depressed me. In a good way of course. Abortion is wrong, I'm glad people are taking a stand on it.

[Barry S. Maltese]

Very matter of fact, my dear lady. I agree with your view, and like how you stated your feelings. I just wish that more people felt the way that we do. . . . Good work!!

[Tim]

It is a child and have always felt abortion is the same as murder. A child is a special gift. To many people do not want to be responsible enough for their actions so the take the easy way out and terminate the life of the child.
Those few sentences that you wrote are very powerful.

[Stephanie Marie<3]

This is amazing hun. I love it; so true. I feel the same way you do, trust me. Love you biotch! =]