Drowning

This is my first poem on writerscafe! I don't really know what to tell you. So, give it a chance?

Deeper and deeper,

my head submerges

into the vast ocean,

too tired to kick back up,

losing every shred of hope

and will I had left.

I struggle to breathe

as water fills my lungs

cutting any sound

that struggles to escape.

My mind is empty,

as blank as a fresh sheet

of paper.

Thoughts are too painful.

I can't think.

I don't think.

I don’t want to remember.

Abandoning me,

after giving me your word.

White lies,

now tainted with empty promises,

saying that you would always be there.

I believed you,

taking the risk

of trusting a person again.

I held it,

wrapping it around myself,

burying myself into the comfort, routine, and security.

What did I do wrong?

Losing consciousness,

I stop trying.

Getting back to the surface

is useless.

Waves crash onto the shore,

dragging my lifeless body

back to land.

Author's Note

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! How was the idea itself?