gift of air

wasting air, kind of like how some people waste their life

don't panic

 

the air is coming,

feeling it filling your mouth, throat

stomach, hitting there

so you swell. 

 

don't gasp with greed, struggle or curse the world

until you feel the euphoria of

nearly dying, nearly

not making it to see another sunrise

 

and I told them too, not to panic.

and see?

 

now their air is wasted,

itcannot be used again. 

Reviews

[Nicholas Hallows]

When I first read this it reminded me of the end scene of Total Recall when the air is released on Mars... hehe... yes, I am a closet Schwarzenegger fan. It truly is a crime to waste our lives because I don't believe he get another chance after we are dead. And if you think about every breath of air you take being its only life then we better use it wisely. Well written again. NH

[Andrea Di Martino]

Casey, sometimes you astound me. I love the start of this: "Don't panic, the air is coming" and i love the starkness of this. The only bump I see is the last line of the second stanza. If this could be reworded for a better flow you'd have a real winner. --andrea.

[Steve Thompson]

Basic and true! This is a idea that should be brought to the table. Solid read

[A.r. Bazian]

i dont know what gave you the idea to write this!
but i actually enjoyed it!

its a good writing!

keep it up!

[Valorie J. Shearer]

So surreal! Reminds me of what we are doing to this planet!!! Great work! Take care~~~