Farewell

something I wrote for my best friend and her boyfriend who live with about nine states in between them...

 

“would you think of me?”

 

I asked, shook

and wondered, doubted

as I

tend to do.

 

Thoughts flooded my head

crowded my thinking with panic

 

my mind skipped, tripped and

imagined a thousand

horrid answers that

could tumble,

flow or breathe forth

 

My heart was beating slowly,

I hardly felt it as my palms went sweaty,

clammy and weak

 

and then, he kissed me.

 

so my mind was full of him and the doubts

fled, guilty back to their corners,

      not defeated and still sinister,

but willing to wait their turn. 

Author's Note

the general stuff - just looking for feedback

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

well i really love it; especially considered you drew forth these emotions from thinking of anothers situation, as if it were your own.

i think you really got into the girl's head perfectly, how we would worry, feel... doubt.

"and then, he kissed me.



so my mind was full of him and the doubts

fled, guilty back to their corners,"

that was my favorite part. this whole piece flowed so wonderfully.... a really tight, creative, and well-verse write :)