give

another spur-of-the-moment write. I'm not extremely fond of this one, sop rip it up all you want.

I like grey.

Shades that weave in and out a between

all you funky

colors that, in the end,

never last. 

 

The light won't take me and the dark

doesn't want me

so I am straddling the median and

wondering...

 

as the crossing lines draw thin and the encroching

spheres drive me

back-foreward-back

again....

 

you catch me

in the pending action

of choosing a side

and giving in...

 

Author's Note

spelling? grammar? meaning/understanding? the basics - and don't hold back

Reviews

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

hmmm.... well it is chaotic and leaves the reader wanting more. but in the same stances it is good the way it is because it shows the unpredicability of your thoughts with in your mind. so i say well done!

[Andrea Di Martino]

Hey Casey,
I really like this one a lot. i like the beat feel to it (which is something i can never manage). Three little notes: it should be "encroaching" not "encroching", it should be "forward" not "foreward". and also i wonder if the flow of the second stanza might not be better if you replaced the word "doesn't" with "don't" ??? i know it is not proper grammar, but again, for the flow....

Again, i really like this one!!