Running Against The Currents

Peer pressure.

Some friends they tell you that It's not cool,
the other ones dropped out of school.
One day you crack under the pressure,
and run with the currents, thats what you do.

 

It's never late to go back home,
because suddenly, you feel alone.

And although you struggle with loneliness,
you'll keep on running from the people you miss.

 

But at a certain point it gets hard to cope,
you've lost it, you have no hope.
Come over here I'll teach you how.

Its easy, all you have to do is:

 

Stop. Where. You. Are,
just say no.

On my mark,

Get ready. Get set. GO!

Author's Note

I'm really bad under pressure.

I just tried to write something that would help a little.

Constructive critism is welcome.

=] ;D

Reviews

[Hide From God]

This a very nice poem and it captures the tough subject of peer pressure we all face. It's something in our lives that talked about but is still overlooked. Just a couple questions though.

"you've lost it, you have no hope."

What is it that is lost? Could it be the choice to choose? I got to this line and stumbled, just was not sure what you were talking about.

Once again this is masterfully written and I am very impressed, please continue writing, you are quite talented!

-Bryan

[Sara Hannah]

Do it foh Johnny!

-Sara

[Kerry]

I echo the reviews of Sam, Ants and John. You captured youth and loneliness well. I wonder if we older folks forget how difficult it can be to remain steadfast under the onslaught of peer pressure. John is right. That peer pressure never stops. Nicely done!

[Ralphy]

OH my Marina, you really really out did yourself here. I think this is a wonderful poem, and you have a talent that is equally as good, all around. I am happy that I stumbled on this, and i hope that more of my friends read your work...hugs...bbr btw post this on your other page...let others see it...

[Sam Freeland]

First, thank you for understanding Youth and Age. Your poem is a remarkable, insightful effort
that caught my attention and respect. It is no wonder that
you have been praised so eloquently by many.

[Ants']

Its Beautiful, Your poem is very Poignant. "And although you struggle with loneliness, you'll keep on running from the people you miss" Well this stanza hits very close to home for me.

[John J. Smiley]

Peer pressure never stops. Grade school, high school, college, work, neighbors, The trick is to get everyone to follow you. Writing like you are, you will be the trend setter. Nice poem. Thanks.

[Emily]

I as well am bad under pressure.
It is a problem, and i like your way of managing it!
Amazing poem, great rhyming scheme.
It also flows well, which I find ironic, because it's about not going with the flow.

[Michelle Long]

I like this.=]
It's got like that songish flow through it....*does Mexican hat dance*

The points you pertray are awsome.
And this:
"Stop. Where. You. Are,
just say no.
On my mark,
Get ready. Get set. GO"
Is unique...& SUPEROOBER catchy! xD
Great job!

[Wunderlich]

Hey, another awesome write. I really like the structure and feel of your poems. Another awesome job.