Can You See?

You consume my every thought

Your glowing flame drew forth the moth

Compelled by you against all reason

But you can’t see

 

You’ve taken captive my tender heart

And all I know is how to love you

How to envision the lines of your face, the feel of your hands on mine

But you can’t see

 

My dreams are flooded with scenes of you

Of memories past and future hopes

And I wake in tears each time they fade

And I lose you for the second time… third time… fourth time…

 

And if I had the chance to be yours again

I’d give my all like I should have before

And there’d be no one else but you

Only you, forever you

 

Can't you see?

Author's Note

I really am not a fan of love poems. They irritate me quickly because so many people write them and you're hard pressed to come across one that's different and intriguing. However, it seems that the love poem muse bit me on my writing hand today so this is what came out. It does feel weird though.

Reviews

[HorrorMaster]

really amazing poem

[Coyote Poetry]

When love was sweet and precious. Is hard to forget. A excellent poem of love. I like the gentle story and the strong ending.
Coyote

[Chantel]

I liked it, especially the third stanza :)

[Norma M Sutton]

I agree with your note, but enjoyed your change of venue greatly.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is amazing work. It's so natural and fluid.

[Liza]

i can see why you're not a fan of love poems; most of them sound very overwhelming and unrealistic - too dramatic - unlike real life :)

this was a complimentary poem of love filled with passion and ache.

[JENY]

My god…
On reading your lines…
Somewhere inside me..
A scar moved…
And started bleeding once again….
You put me….
Into a depressive mood..
Cattie….you are one of the best poets…
In this café…
Really….your poems are…
Powerful..

[MissWordSmith]

ah. i felt such sadness! normally i'm not a fan of the poem with no rhyme, but this my dear was SO beautiful it didnt need to rhyme!

And I lose you for the second time… third time… fourth time…
ahh.. that certainly pulled at the heartstrings

[littlelilypurplebride]

not everyone does the same love poems that would be very dull. this was sad yet very beautiful. god bless lily

[Tina Kline]

A tragic sounding love poem where the person love is missed/lost every time the person wakes from dreaming about them. I really do like your love poem here a lot.