Summer Wine

You drift in

A smoky mist, so uninvited

I locked you out so long ago

But still you seep in through the cracks

Saturating the air with your sweet aroma

Filling my head with nonsensical notions

Making me drunk as evening wine

 

You turn my head

With just a word in the right direction

A never ending reel of tape

Filled with an affluence of memories

Lakeside embraces, rosy sunsets

A tangle of bodies in a grassy field

Undoubted protection

 

You resisted me

When I pushed you away

Fanned your alluring mist from my eyes

I fancied justice in my actions

For you and for me

There was none

 

But you remain

You captivate my every moment

Every thought soaked in your intoxicating lure

And I ponder in those ephemeral moments

What could have been

Had I seen what treasure I held in my hands

Before I tucked it away

 

You

The one who lies in my inner heart

The one who possess the ability

To mend me or tear me down

To wrap me eternally around your finger

With one single word

 

You

The one who cannot be expunged

Though I tried so hard to push you away

Until I gave in, drank in your memory

Inebriated with your summer wine

Dizzy with fabricated mirth

Reviews

[Lexi Nicole]

Love it! Your imagery is fantastic. The set-up of the poem is wonderful. Beautiful work, really. Thank you for sharing!

-Teagan.

[HorrorMaster]

Good job

[Chantel]

Whoa....REALLY good job...your writing is flawless, I never have anything to say but great job, sorry if my reviews all sound the same, but you are such a great writer!! :)

[Amy Vaughn]

I absolutely LOVE this. It's perfect. The wording, the flow, everything. I can relate to it also. I look forward to reading more of your writing.

[MissWordSmith]

You drift in

A smoky mist, so uninvited

I locked you out so long ago

But still you seep in through the cracks

Saturating the air with your sweet aroma

Filling my head with nonsensical notions

Making me drunk as evening wine



my oh my! ;) what AMAZING descriptions! i'm so jealous i didn't think of this first.

[Norma M Sutton]

This is beautiful and scary. Scary that a person could have that much influence over another.

[Dev]

I love this. The way it reads and the way it flows makes it a wonderful read. It has a very nice imagery to it and the words you use to describe every detail seem to do complete justice to your emotions. Very well written and equally well expressed. Rings out true for almost anyone out there. There is always this one person who has this power over us - a friend, a lover, a family member, and this poem of yours does very well describe that and is a very good metaphor for love and the sentiments of pride involved with it.

[littlelilypurplebride]

i agree with coyote. this is very beautiful work this is very uplifting much sunshine and light beauty to this piece. you helped me write a new poem i thank the heavenly father and you i will post it and share it with you. god bless lily p.s. how have you been lately hows your lovely little ones and your sweet little baby of yours talk soon blessings lily

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and wonderful tale of emotion and love. Hard to open doors and allow someone in. The fear of disappointment can leave us alone unless we open our mind and heart. I like your ending. A outstanding poem.
"Until I gave in, drank in your memory
Inebriated with your summer wine
Dizzy with fabricated mirth"
Coyote

[Allison]

This is totally awesome! I love how your basically saying you're intoxicated with love (Heehee sorry Tommy) and it sounds like something summer wine would induce. Haha if that made sense. Forget my rambling, this was beautiful and that's all that matters!