Break

I am breaking

Tearing heart and soul to shreds

A mind so riddled with confusion

Where all that's felt is fear and dread

 

Every night

They steal the sleep my body needs

Hiding, lonely, in the dark

They cause the wounds I've healed to bleed

 

And while I fight

I know they have the upper hand

I know I'm trapped in an iron grasp

I'll drown before I get to land

 

Each move I make

Sends poison coursing through my veins

And I can't figure out a way

To somehow ease this searing pain

 

I need someone

To tell my brain to make me breathe

To pull the blindfold from my eyes

So I can see where I should be

 

I'm taken over

These thoughts reach out to grasp my mind

Oh endless fight

I cannot leave this world behind...

Author's Note

Tentative title.

Reviews

[♥(heatherawesome..]

This is a wonderful written poem

[Leanne Conway]

Beautiful! It was well written. I loved the second stanza!

[HorrorMaster]

Really good :)

[Chantel]

Love it, especially the second stanza...

[Allison]

This is absolutely beautiful! Nice job!! I love the way you describe things in terms of the pain u feel.

[Tomi]

lovely, i think it captured my attention while reading through....lovely

[Liza]

very intense from beginning to end; holding its tension - a creative write that makes one realize how lucky we are that the body has its automatic motions when our emotions want to fall apart and destruct

[Albatross]

Reminds me of Sylvia Plaths "The Bell Jar."
Life is a course in which we are constantly and subconsciously taking off the blindfold and opening our eyes to different and new forms of reality. If only there was a way to always be on the the bright, happy side of reality. But the cliche and accurate excuse is that we are human, and we will inevitably fall into (hopefully temporary) lapses of sadness and despair.

Spiel aside, this is a deep and beautifully dark piece. Your talent is violently made clear through your words. I absolutely love you and your excellent work. Keep it up!

[MissWordSmith]

"Every night

They steal the sleep my body needs

Hiding, lonely, in the dark

They cause the wounds I've healed to bleed'

WOW.
You are one of my favorite writers one here. Always have been. Your work impresses me so much. Your rhyme meter is perfect, AND everything you say just hits so hard. Great GREAT work.

They say a writer writes what they know. You must have had to go through a lot to write so flawlessly. I'm just glad you're ABLE to write it down, shows you've come a long way. Take care, keep writing!

[Natalie]

Absolutely breathtaking. Can I express to you just how much I looove your poetry? Probably not. :) This really touched my heart. Thank you