Sweet Allure

Hush now, darling's sleeping
Lifeless face turned toward the sky
Folded hands rest on her bosom
Kiss her cheek now, don't you cry

She's finally gained the peace she yearned for
Through the sweet allure of death
No haunting feelings, good or bad
Since she let out her final breath

No more will sadness frame her face
No more scars will line her wrist
She's done with the artificial smiles
No longer fighting to coexist

She realized joy was not for her
The darkness kept it far at bay
She knew she'd never be enough
And so she took herself away

So hush now, darling's sleeping
Lifeless face turned toward the sky
Folded hands rest on her bosom
Say goodbye now, don't you cry

Author's Note

Comments & constructive criticism welcome, as usual.

Reviews

[Norah]

Love this!!
Keep on writing!!

[Aggie Skeleton]

I really liked this peice, it was moving and sweet. An eigth on the Hysteria scale.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I loved this piece. I loved the flow to this piece as well. It went together perfectly. I like this a lot too. Thanks for sharing. :D

[Chantel]

You are such a good writer..amazinggg flow :) I like this a lot, good job :)

[The Analog Kid]

A real sad, heartfelt picture of someone finding peace from a life of hell.

[Tina Kline]

A brilliant poem but incredibly sad. Sometimes death can seem better when life is nothing but a painful hell. We can only hope suicides find the peace they are so desperate for.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes death take away the pain of this life. A escape from this life. I hope they find a better place. I never met but one person who welcome death. Most people fight for their last breath. A very sad poem. When people leave us too soon. Many tears will fall. A excellent poem and story.
Coyote

[PaperHearts]

That was an incredible poem! The scene that you painted was absolutely heartbreaking, but beautiful nonetheless. I liked the sense of love and warmth that you created within this piece, despite the tragic circumstances which you were describing. I really liked the fact that the last stanza echoed the first stanza, as it seemed to reflect a sense of closure for the character in the piece. A lovely write,
~PaperHearts

[♥(heatherawesome..]

wow i love it and keep it up and way to go

[Norma M Sutton]

This is beautiful and peaceful. Good job