If...

If...

A Poem by A.Lee

If I stood
At the top of the highest building
Would you come?
Do I deserve to change my mind?

If I leapt
Took off to reach unmoving concrete
Would you reach out?
Do I deserve to be alive?

If I fell
Both wind and heartbeat quickly racing
Would you catch me?
Do I deserve to escape my fate?

And if you did
Embrace me in that final grasp
Would it be right?
Or would we both deserve to die?

© 2010 A.Lee


Author's Note

A.Lee
This piece reflects the thought of leaping, not necessarily into death or suicide, but into depression or giving up on oneself. Often times, suffering ones yearn for someone to pull them back and tell them that they deserve to be happy, or to live, but at the same time they wonder if being saved was the "right" thing to do. Maybe they didn't deserve it. Anyhow, just thoughts. :) Comment.

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A very thought provoking piece, but I'd always opt to try to give a hand or to hang in there, though both can be very tough to do sometimes. Well done piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was really interesting.. the tone drastically changed in the second stanza, but it wasn't jarring as it could have been. The repetition of structure worked very well in this piece... nice write. :)

Coral

Posted 14 Years Ago


Well, this is interested to read, you did a great job on this poem.I read your note as well, your point is just showed up in the poem. good job

Posted 14 Years Ago



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