Trapped

Trapped
Between unyielding walls
Cold stone blockades on either side
There is no space to breathe
No little place to try and hide

Alone
No sun to warm this chilling hole
There's only darkness all around
And heavy weights upon the heart
That try to push her underground

So Lost
All thoughts of hope begin to wane
There's no escape from the cell she's in
Life's essence starts to fade away
And she will not be seen again

Author's Note

I don't know.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

This is my favorite poem that you've written so far. I really enjoyed the structure of the poem and the flow. How the stanzas emphasis and describe the first words so well and so emotionally. It's a really nice dark, depressive piece and I loved the second stanza, especially the ending line "That try to push her underground" because it really did feel like a weight was pushing you as you read it. Well done!

[Marie Harrison]

Oooh, not a place I would enjoy. I have terrible clausterphobia! A gripping piece to read!

[Tina Kline]

A description of a painful, very painful, situation to be in. For me, I read in this someone trapped in a life that is crushing them, destroying them and they can find no way out. I really like this poem.

[Ruth]

Trying to supress the pain and anguish seems profound here love:) This is an intense poem that is really moving and shows hope even though it has been shattered
xx

[Nianque]

This poem conveys the feeling of being trapped. I don't like that feeling. Plus she is also alone too. Trapped and Alone that is a horrible combo.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

i understand this very well keep hanging in there this poem Touched me i have written some thing for you i am going to post it now, your always in my prayers my friend god bless

[Norma M Sutton]

A cold tomb indeed. Very nice.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is haunting. You have written a beautiful nightmare. I see the spirit of darkness trying to bury her and drown out her life..but I sincerely hope this will be another tale of the phoenix. The imagery was without restraint.

[Michael X]

hey Angela, this is a great "poem" imo.. quite subtle- striking, good job!

This was beautiful. You know when a poem is full of true greatness when you reread it, and when you feel the poem sink inside of you. I felt these feelings, and I just wanted to tell you that you are one of my favorite poets on this website. You always know how to connect to people's emotions and thoughts in such simple ways. Great poem. 100/100

[Ashley Black]

you are such a talented writer i'm very glad i found this website your writing always inspires me to keep writing and hang in there even in my struggles because even if it doesn't seem like it it'll pay off someday