Trapped

Trapped

A Poem by A.Lee

Trapped
Between unyielding walls
Cold stone blockades on either side
There is no space to breathe
No little place to try and hide

Alone
No sun to warm this chilling hole
There's only darkness all around
And heavy weights upon the heart
That try to push her underground

So Lost
All thoughts of hope begin to wane
There's no escape from the cell she's in
Life's essence starts to fade away
And she will not be seen again

© 2010 A.Lee


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A.Lee
I don't know.

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This is my favorite poem that you've written so far. I really enjoyed the structure of the poem and the flow. How the stanzas emphasis and describe the first words so well and so emotionally. It's a really nice dark, depressive piece and I loved the second stanza, especially the ending line "That try to push her underground" because it really did feel like a weight was pushing you as you read it. Well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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While I read this I thought of this eerie ambient track I heard once before. Rather mysterious, highly visual, very interesting!!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


so sad..

Posted 14 Years Ago


very nice write...........i liked the way you've captioned each stanza

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is really powerful and effective. The fact that this person is trapped in the cold hole of herself makes me feel heavy hearted. These descriptions are really strong and deep.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I think this was a really good write. I thought this was very interesting. I felt like I was trapped in a world by myself and no one was there to help me. I didn't know what to expect for me. That's my opinion though. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


short, powerful and to the point. You may not know, but I do. I know that it is a good poem and I like it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is my favorite poem that you've written so far. I really enjoyed the structure of the poem and the flow. How the stanzas emphasis and describe the first words so well and so emotionally. It's a really nice dark, depressive piece and I loved the second stanza, especially the ending line "That try to push her underground" because it really did feel like a weight was pushing you as you read it. Well done!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent write. I like the form you used here. Really brings your work to life in this piece. Dark piece with a bleak ending. somebody needs a hug.

Posted 14 Years Ago


If she does reappear, she would be different and much stronger. I like this, very dark and heavy, but well written for sure. Another brilliant write darlin'.

Posted 14 Years Ago


been there before.
:'[
really good poem,
reminds me of my past...

Posted 14 Years Ago



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A.Lee

Monroe, GA



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