Metamorphosis

I am a tiny, ugly, nothing
Each day is just another fight
Trying not to be consumed
By all the pain and hurt of life

I'm facing millions of new battles
Each one stronger than myself
It's hopeless to think I'll overcome
They should have trusted someone else

Soon enough they'll come to see
I'm nothing but a big mistake
There's no way I'll reach the top
I die with every step I take

So I am giving up for good
Wrap myself tight in a safe cocoon
Where nothing bad can ever reach me
I've succumbed to this fateful gloom

But you keep calling from the outside
Begging me to rise again
Your voice infiltrates my enclosure
Why won't you let me just give in?

But soon your prodding gets to me
And with a sigh, I do oblige
But if I fall again (and I will)
Then you can kiss it all good-bye

I built my prison all too well
I have to fight just to escape
But as I finally do emerge
A brand new me starts to take shape

I'm startled as I start to glow
Testing new wings colored bright
As I take off, I hear you whisper
"See, I just knew someday she'd fly!"

Author's Note

~Inspired by a comment on one of my poems left by Rory CJ Frankson (Ro-mon)~

Reviews

[Desert Dreamer]

I like the way this poem starts out gloomy and ends with a new beginning, a poem of hope in the dark times. I have had dark times and I remember how it felt so safe to stay behind my walls to heal and how difficult it is to emerge out into the world again. Your poem brings memories to me and I feel in your poem a hope for the future. Thank you for sharing.

[zombiikillah666]

this is really good. (:
i loved it. xD

[JenLyn]

I really like this, it flowed well and the rhyme scheme was excellent in my opinion. It's going in my library, great write, keep it up! :)

[Poeticpiers]

No surrender. M'lady you could no more give up writing than give up breathing Always remember you are unique a one off.No one could replace you.
Cocoons of safety become prisons very quickly

[floarealbastra10]

very heartfelt

[Nianque]

The beginning had me worried but I love how it changes to hope. It beautiful how you shifting from dark to light. Take a deep breath and fly. :) As always your work is improving with each letter and stanza completed. I'm looking forward to your future creative workings.

[Tina Kline]

It seems so many people feel this way, trapped in the horrors of depression to the point they think they are worthless and no good and why should anyone care. Lucky are those who have people who do care and can help them find their way out again. Wonderful write, painful but wonderful.

[Norma M Sutton]

Ahh, but the fight, the struggle is what strengthens your new wings so you can fly higher and higher. Your work is growing and getting better.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like the way you shifted through time in this poem. It was dark and hopless, but as we read along the chains were broken. On second made all the difference in the world. I guess we shouldn't wait forever to tell people how we feel. The ending was blinding. The future looks bright indeed. May that light bring a beautiful reflection.

[Senseless whatever]

Good write. The imagery is good all through. A nice even flow to this read. Only you can realize your own potential, we can but sit and watch.

[The Analog Kid]

Very personal. You are very in touch with your inner self. That is a start. Nicely written:)