Panic

Your heart races
A million horses' hooves
Pounding hard against your chest
Pushing faster and faster
As it threatens to explode

Your hands sweat
The hottest fire ever built
Sending cold chills down your spine
Flashing heat, flashing warmth
Your body can't decide

There's no more air
The vacuum sucks your breath away
Sends lightning shooting through your palms
An anvil resting on your chest
You fight to breathe

Your mind is spinning
But you cannot seem to think
Thoughts rush by like a speeding train
You reach out to grasp the end
Nothing to hold

You're stuck in place
Scared so stiff you cannot move
Frozen at the mountain's peak
Tearing once sound logic down
The end is near

Your heart is racing
Hands are sweating
Struggling to breathe
Your mind is spinning
While you're stuck in this state
Panic

Author's Note

Another "different" one. Again, don't compare it to my usual work because its not the same. Consider it on its own.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

This is a great poem. I love the flow and the content is great. It really has the vibe that make it seem like your heart is really racing because the flow is so quick that it rushes you through, but not so quick that you rush through without reading every word and feeling every emotion. There's only one error I have to point out and that's in the second line, "million's" shouldn't be pluralized. Other than that, amazingly written, great emphasis on a single emotion.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

It is for me the perfect description of a panic attack.. I hate them and have them often. This is wonderful and descriptive sounds like a panic attack.

Chloe

[Amber-The-Panda]

This is exactly what panic is. The horror you feel. You described it well. Everything you said I could almost feel. The thing about the horse hooves pounding against your chest was my favorite part. Overall good job!

[A]

Panic attacks are a HORRIBLE feeling! I've had many of them, sadly. You explained a panic attack to a T. You used all of the right words to express the feeling and angst of a panic attack. VERY well written! Very relateable as well. GREAT piece! :)

[floarealbastra10]

your poems are amazing, good job

[Norma M Sutton]

I like the imagery in this one.

[thatbryngirl]

you amaze me!! :) you're really good at this!! i love your writing! :) very good!

[Aggie Skeleton]

nice description. kewl read.

[The Analog Kid]

This is a really cool stanza: "Your heart races
A million's horses hooves
Pounding hard against your chest
Pushing faster and faster
As it threatens to explode."

What a perfect description of the way panic makes you feel inside.

[Desert Dreamer]

I have experienced this state of panic, you have described it well, especially the way one loses logic and the mind spins.

[Crowley]

Whew...I hate panic, and you did a good job of painting a great picture of it. Nice work.