Open Arms

Lift the veil so we can breathe

Let us see the shining sun

Open up your rusty gates

Give us shelter in your warmth

 

Pull us out of the heavy sand

And let us bathe in your cool springs

Lift the weight that bears us down

Give us space to spread our wings

 

Don’t leave us hiding in the dark
Where we choke and fade to dust

Lift us out of the gloomy swamp

And let us melt in your embrace

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This was an inspiration. I loved the line:

*Open up your rusty gates*

It's like the world has forgotten that they have someone they can lean on. This had me think of how sad this world would be if our pillar of support collapsed under our weight. This poem truly made me grateful to be able to as for help and protection under the love that is held for us all. Beautiful work. There is a gentle confidence in it all..that every cry for help will be responded to.

[Senseless whatever]

Great write. Inspiring full of hope.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

beautiful.

[alesuriko]

Good imagery in this piece. I like the lifting of the veil image. To me it either feels like a reference to religion and possibly how someone's god/deity abandoned them and the speaker wants the god/deity to bring light on the despair of the world. Or it could simply be a commentary on society and how we've fallen into a pit of darkness and lowered ourselves to slum. Probably the spiritual one though, that's what it feels like more. Well done with this poem.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is adorable. I love it!! Thanks for sharing. :)

[Sam Severn]

Gorgeous, Cattie! ㋡

This was so optimistic and uplifting :) I enjoyed reading this. It's rare to read a uplifting piece of poetry (there is nothing wrong with that, I write dark poetry too), and this was a nice, rare change :) Good job. I loved the imagery. There was a weird rhyming pattern, if there even was a rhyming pattern, but then again I'm really tired right now so I might just be leaving a meaningless comment about nothing :) Good job, anyways.

[Miss Coral]

Wonderful imagery, but I felt that the rhyming was a bit weird with that random one thrown in. Altogether, I really liked it. c:

[Jenny Nelson]

A very beautiful and uplifting piece. Hope for the weary. Very nicely done!

[The Analog Kid]

I like the imagery you used. Very spiritual and refreshing.