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Compartment 114
Compartment 114
Open Arms

Open Arms

A Poem by A.Lee

Lift the veil so we can breathe

Let us see the shining sun

Open up your rusty gates

Give us shelter in your warmth

 

Pull us out of the heavy sand

And let us bathe in your cool springs

Lift the weight that bears us down

Give us space to spread our wings

 

Don’t leave us hiding in the dark
Where we choke and fade to dust

Lift us out of the gloomy swamp

And let us melt in your embrace

© 2010 A.Lee


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This was an inspiration. I loved the line:

*Open up your rusty gates*

It's like the world has forgotten that they have someone they can lean on. This had me think of how sad this world would be if our pillar of support collapsed under our weight. This poem truly made me grateful to be able to as for help and protection under the love that is held for us all. Beautiful work. There is a gentle confidence in it all..that every cry for help will be responded to.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A beautiful poem. We need to be able to see. To know freedom and be able to hold on to dreams and hope. I like your ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is a great poem. Your word choice was very well used.

I only have one problem. "Where we choke fade to dust" needs punctuation of some sort. The way it is right now confused me and made me stumble a little bit.

Other than that this poem is great. Good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was beautifully written and well expressed. You have a passion in your writing that many lack and that is why I enjoy it so much.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Awesome poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is beautiful. I love the last two lines of each stanza.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i love it awesome

Posted 14 Years Ago


this could be anywhere -- this took me back down the road to a place in my past that made me who i am but would love to forget

Posted 14 Years Ago


I agree, this is an inspiration, asking for God to lift us up out of the mess that we are into his Holy Embrace.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This was an inspiration. I loved the line:

*Open up your rusty gates*

It's like the world has forgotten that they have someone they can lean on. This had me think of how sad this world would be if our pillar of support collapsed under our weight. This poem truly made me grateful to be able to as for help and protection under the love that is held for us all. Beautiful work. There is a gentle confidence in it all..that every cry for help will be responded to.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is poetically shimmering:)
Nice use of emotion and hope!
A beautiful piece!
xx

Posted 14 Years Ago



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A.Lee
A.Lee

Monroe, GA



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I am lots of things, but here you'd identify most with the writer and avid reader. I have three beautiful children. The oldest boy, Seth, passed last year after fighting a long battle with cancer. .. more..

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