Servant Girl

Look down, love, here I am
Kneeling low before your feet
This lady's here for all you need
To hold you up when you are weak

I try not to walk in front of you
So as not to block your way
I stand beside you, loyal servant,
Keep those with bad intent at bay

I'm a pedestal for your feet
When you're too weary to stand alone
No matter if hurt, or tired, or sore
For its your place that I call home

Look down, love, here I am
Fighting to do all that you ask
Putting myself aside as best I can
Covering me up with an iron mask

I'm a pillar for you to lean on
Whenever things for you get rough
And though I try so very hard
It seems I'm never good enough

I don't know how to make you see
That for your smile, I'd give my all
Your lady is ready to sacrifice
Herself to break your fall

Look down, love, here I am
Kneeling low beneath your feet
Giving everything I have
In hopes you'll someday notice me

Reviews

[Jessica Mai]

another one on Cattie Rain's EPIC poems. Honestly, you emit your message with so much creativity and feeling. I love this one.

[deeps]

sad write here, well expressed

[James Watts]

I know this. I am in a situation like that and it is very painful. Very nice write.

[♥(heatherawesome..]

this is awesome love it

[HorrorMaster]

amazing poem

[Devons]

A skilfully-written, conceived and arranged piece of work. You bring your artistry once more to a theme that I have noticed recurs in many poems of yours. This is a relationship that I am beginning to become very familiar with now. The writer is perpetually confined, it seems, to this subservient position in what appears to be an otherwise loving relationship - but the balance within this relationship is clearly somewhat one-sided, and the frustration comes out in the form of poetic catharsis. I think at one time this kind of theme was somewhat emotionally overwhelming and affected your style to a certain extent, but now there is a balance between these emotions and the writing itself, so that the result is far more polished and precise. The thing that I would be wary of though is repeating the theme too often in different ways. I mean this in the same way that I see love poems - there's only so many ways you can say the same thing, no matter how well-written a piece of writing may be. Also, it becomes difficult to review such work without repeating what you've already said in a previous attempt...!!
All the same, your skill as a writer of verse is extremely consistent and of a high standard.

[An owl on the moon]

There is a beautiful, bittersweet feel here in the longing to be noticed... the desperation to be found and loved.. Wonderfully deep and rich with imagery.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

nice write ,love this line.


Look down, love, here I am
Kneeling low before your feet
This lady's here for all you need
To hold you up when you are weak

[Senseless whatever]

Great write. Emotional, longing for recognition or worth from another. The first line says it all.

[alesuriko]

Very nice, good flow and rhythm to it. Great imagery and vivid expression.