I'll Never Tell

I need help

(but I’ll never tell you)

I’m too afraid of what you’ll think

When you realize that I’m not as strong

As you want and need me to be

 

I pretend to be strong

Every moment of the day

Always hoping when I wake up

I’ll no longer have to fake this smile

To cover up the tears inside

 

I need help

(but I’ll never tell you)

If I let you see how I truly feel

I’ll bring you down with my emotions

Instead of focusing on yours

 

So I keep on walking forward

Trying not to see myself

Just like Atlas on bended knee

I must hold up your world and mine

Lest we both come crashing down

 

I need help

(but I’ll never tell you)

I can’t afford to let you down

So I watch as my soul slowly dies

From the pain I carry inside

 

I wish there was someone

Who cared for me like I care for you

Who’d let me cry upon their shoulder

And build me up from time to time

Because I’m fading, slowly fading

And I need help…

Reviews

[R.S. Wilder]

Huh. This is another stunningly, emotion-centered, heart-relating piece. Many people, I am sure, will relate to this on one level or another, and because it's real, it makes it beautiful and...it's like you've written a symphony without the music.
Beautiful.

[thatbryngirl]

Beautiful and powerful! i can relate,...with a couple of my friends with this... i know the feeling. :/

but again, very well done! youre very talented angela:)

[Nianque]

Stunning. I agree with JENY.

[MiidniightSoul]

This is amazing. A beautiful, powerful and stunning poem. Very good ^__^

[JENY]

Wow…..
You have that rare skill of identifying one’s own hidden emotions, needs, and feelings…in their right form and shape…
And….your lines reveal…a wonderful ability of your psyche…..
To carry on your hopeless situations….with a special way of indifference……
To explain which…..I do not get apt words…
Great work…..

[Chris Lotus]

Yet again, very nice emotion. Nice usage of a simile/allusion. Added extra power to the piece.

[♥(heatherawesome..]

this is good adn you did a good job love it

[WriterSki7]

6 stanzas, five lines each. No rhyme.
Does every relationship on Writerscafe have to be horrible? I can't help but notice people love to lament the awefulness of their lives, just like this poem. Regardless, this was a nice piece. Running with emotion, of coruse. Just don't confuse agreeable emotions with good literature.

[Ladie NiQue]

So honest.. I enjoyed reading this. Good job..!

[Senseless whatever]

Awesome write. Emotional and to the point. Easier to think out the conversation or question then to say it. Moving forward is the key.