Walk With Her

She trudged along the sidewalk
Dusty feet and broken smile
On her back a load of burdens
Stacked nigh twenty miles high

She's passed so many people
Who stare at her with such disdain
Some click their tongues in pity
Yet the leave her in the rain

She tries to hold her head up high
Stumbling down this old cracked road
She longs to see a friendly smile
But she's forced to walk alone

Exhausted now, she sits to rest
She lays her burden down
People rush to swarm around her
Full of anger they gather round

"Just who do you think you are?" they shout
"You get no time to rest!
The very last thing that you deserve
Is peace and happiness!"

With teary eyes and broken heart
She stands up to face her trial
Wishing someone out there cared enough
To simply walk with her awhile

Author's Note

I wrote this last night when I was half asleep. Literally. So take it easy :)

Reviews

[Ashley Black]

amazing work as usual i loved it :) very beautifully written you are an amazing poet :) as long as you enjoy writing i hope you always do!

[Jessica Mai]

I really enjoyed this. I love the metaphor of walking to represent life and the last stanza is so true. We don't need someone to necessarily take away our heavy burdens and problems, we just need their comfort to make them seem a little lighter. Well done on this.

[aftervision]

With teary eyes and broken heart
She stands up to face her trial
Wishing someone out there cared enough
To simply walk with her awhile

so often we look for the footsteps that will escort us only to find that they did the same -- i love the set of eyes that woke you in the night my poet

[ashley]

Oh wow, this actually brought out tears. Another brilliant poem. You really do have a gift. Fantastic job! :D

[C.J.G.]

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Amazing. Great, great job Cattie.

[JENY]

Nice piece of writing
Reflects the empathetic skill of the poet
In you….
Keep it up…

[Christina May Shanaberg]

It can be a very lonely and cruel world, when someone is burdened with more than their share of woes. I loved the last two lines, a perfect completion to a fine poem. Great job of writing!

[Undying Glory]

wow i love the whole idea and everything about this poem. brilliant

[Miss Coral]

Wonderful piece-- I'm super curious about the story behind her. Beautifully sad.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

we all needa friend and some one who cares and much loneliness I do Hope your doing alright. Very sad poem but a very good poem