How Long?

How Long?

A Poem by A.Lee
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An epic story. Person A gets mad, Person B apologizes. Person A says okay but still wants to be curt. Person B gets mad at that. Endless cycle.

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How long must I wait on bended knee

Before you'll look in my eyes?

How  long will you make me grovel and beg

When I come to apologize?

 

I told you I was sorry

For the way things went before

You say you want to make things work

But when I come you slam the door

 

I don’t know what else I’m supposed to say

Or how I’m supposed to be

When you say that you’re not mad anymore

But I can’t tell if you forgive me

 

You’re pushing me in the corner

Just like you do when you’re hurt

And I guess you think you can not be mad
And still be removed and curt

 

I understand how you feel right now

And after time I know you’ll come around

But remember the longer you keep me away

The longer it takes to rebound


I'll wait for you like I always do

Trying to be what I should

But keeping a woman waiting too long

Doesn't often turn out good

© 2010 A.Lee


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"And after time know you’ll come around"
The flow here threw me off, I had to read it a couple of times to get the flow back, might I suggest adding a word or punctuation?
"And after time I know you’ll come around"
-or-
"And after time, know you’ll come around"

Yes, this is situational, but most people can relate. You're a good writer.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Another emotional piece from you. This reminded me of a poem I wrote long time ago when I feel the same as what you've written above.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very much Understood here i can relate to this alot. love your writings as always

Posted 14 Years Ago


You have brought out so well the tedium of an unforgiving or very slow at forgiving partner. The painful process of waiting and the inability to know what will make it right again. I particularly liked the verse

'You’re pushing me in the corner
Just like you do when you’re hurt
And I guess you think you can not be mad
And still be removed and curt'

I also liked the two strong warnings a relationship must be aware of:

'But remember the longer you keep me away
The longer it takes to rebound'
&
'But keeping a woman waiting too long
Doesn't often turn out good'
Great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this write here. I think this is wonderful.
Very well written as well,

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How long indeed.

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"And after time know you’ll come around"
The flow here threw me off, I had to read it a couple of times to get the flow back, might I suggest adding a word or punctuation?
"And after time I know you’ll come around"
-or-
"And after time, know you’ll come around"

Yes, this is situational, but most people can relate. You're a good writer.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Also, I must say that I disagree with "JENY". This theme is so ubiquitous among novels and memoirs that I think this poem is very unique. It's a way of expressing the usual. I love, love, love it as a poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

GENIUS! You capture this situation perfectly. Everyone in their lifetime has undoubtedly been in one of these situations, and so everyone can relate, especially me. What a great poem. You are very talented.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good…..
But this theme…I think, will be more suitable for a story….than a poem….
Cant you try?


Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was Beautiful Cattie, You waste no time. I am not a girl, BUT!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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