Favorite Things

When darkness falls and rejection calls

It’s hard to push away

To keep those parasitic feelings

From keeping the good ones at bay

 

You close your eyes and try to feel

The things that give you peace

Your favorite soothing happy thoughts

To put your mind at ease

 

A perfect acorn from a tree

A heart traced in the sand

Painted china tea sets

And the warmth from lover’s hand

 

The smell of rain about to fall

A cookie snapped in half

Scented clippings of fresh cut grass

And my newborn baby’s laugh

 

A letter from a far away friend

The promise of a paradise

A fresh squeezed glass of lemonade

With a flower shaped piece of ice

 

A handprint in the sidewalk

A bright blue piece of thread

The crisp white snow while floating down

A slice of fresh baked bread

 

When life begins to go awry

And I feel its arduous stings

I still may open up and smile

And think of my favorite things

Reviews

A good attempt at meter and rhyme. I will be intrusive and make some suggestions to streamline the poem, so it may flow more freely off the tongue.

"When darkness falls and rejection calls"

"And the warmth from lover’s hand"

"A cookie snapped in half"

"A letter from a far-off friend
The lure of paradise"

"The crisp white snow whilst falling"

Those are some fairly minor changes that would help the poem read much me smoothly. Aside from that there is also the line "I won’t worry about what tomorrow brings" which is just a slight too long. I can suggest no change that isn't rewriting it entirely so I leave judgement upon that one to you.

I would like to say more but this talk of favourite things has made me hungry; as it turns out all of my favourite things are edible.

[Elvina CZq]

A wonderful poem, indeed. Everyone has his/her favourite things to think about. In my opinion, if you could put a little more effort to make every line rhymes well, it might sound more fun to read, and feel even adorable. All in all, you did a great job :)

[Devons]

Really skilfully rhymed and put together, this poem. It's almost like it's all merely incidental to life; as though you only think these nice thoughts MAY help, but are doubtful. And then, whilst thinking of what they are, the journey of the lace-like words describing them brings you to a satisying conclusion. Smoothly and smartly done.

[Jessica Mai]

i love it!!!!!!!! This is wonderful! i totally agree. The descriptions in here are just gorgeous. 100

[Tina Kline]

A very positive and uplifting poem. We all need at times to think about the things that make us happy, our favorite things. I really like this.

[PaperHearts]

What a gorgeous write! :D Your descriptive imagery was so ornate, and so evocative, and really brought your poem to life. I thought you had an amazing sense of flow, particularly when it came to the rhyming of the lines. This poem really brought a smile to my face! It was such a refreshing read! xD
~PaperHearts

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

Nice theme and imagery. Somehow I wished I could close my eyes and most of those things in my memory :)

[James Paulin]

I like this poem for many reasons, theme, spirit, tempo, rhyme and word selection meld together like good chili. Very nice work.