The feelings I get

This addresses the guy I like. The way I think about him.

I am just a face on the street

So invisible, so discreet

When you pass me by 

I just wanna say 

You brighten my day 

Making me feel right in so many ways 

While I await words you'll never say

Not one single hello is spoken 

Yet I still melt inside 

Not sure what to say 

Should I smile, should I wave?

When I see you every day. 

I vacillate my thoughts on

what I should do. 

But, every single time I choke 

My tongue turns into one big knot 

And I can't manage a single thought 

If you could read my mind, 

you would laugh at what you would find.

I haven't had a crush in a long while

Yet every time I see you smile. 

It takes me back to the day we met

when I first saw that smile 

But  I haven't seen it in a long while

If we go out,

would the smile come out?

Author's Note

This is my first poem ever. Please let me know what you think and what I could do better for next time.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is very good! Honestly not that bad for a first poem! In fact it's better than the average first poem, so way - to - go! I enjoyed the flow and how rhymes came and went at will - how there wasn't any strict structure. Bravo! I only have comments for the end. First off, no period is needed after the first "smile" since the following line is continuing the thought (so it seems). But mainly, the last few lines appear anticlimactic, for the poem is not about his smile, and the fact that you don't see his smile, and you also don't mention that you've had a first date with him....the first line even says it all - "I'm just a face on the street". So this girl (the protagonist of the poem) is simply gushing over this guy, but there's no reason to believe she even has a chance with him. So, I very much like everything about this poem.....I simply must advise that the last few lines be reworked to fit the energy, and then cap it off with a bang. Good start!!

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Jimmy Glenn]

That is not bad. You have feelings some major thoughts tied in and I believe that is amazing. GOOD JOB.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Very relatable especially to those who remember those teenage crushes fondly. It's a wonderful feeling that you will remember forever. a pleasure reading something so precious