Far Ahead

Taken from the back of my mind.

The dusty road that stretches far ahead of me kills the words in my mouth.

Ahead, I see the never-ending spruce forest- symbol of the growth I must still go through.

The wind blows in their branches- symbol of the change that may arise.

Bumps ornate the dusty road- symbol of the obstacles yet to come.

Beyond the furthest points of my sight the road still goes on, for our souls never cease to exist.

So close it seems that the dark veil covers the way- symbol of death that will adventure itself on Earth to reap my soul.

So close it seems...

I stare behind, where my footprints have yet to be erased.

I see the sparkling waters of the river of my childhood, already coming to its end. The shore is wet and welcoming, but I must go on.

Even if I long to walk back into the past, I feel the wind pushing me forward.

There is still a long way to go until I reach the end of the road, so far ahead.

But yet so close...

Author's Note

This is spontanious writing- no editing was inflicted upon it, and I do not intend to edit it anytime.

Reviews

[We are young.]

perfect, its really nice, i think it would be a great part for a story though. its awesome great job

[LSS]

You don't need to edit it. Its perfectly written. I've seldom seen expression as clearly put as you have done, and on a subject the we are all familiar with. Your style is smooth and carries us along the same road. Your symbolism is accurate and inventive, leaving little out. Well done, I'll be reading more.
LSS

[Dalaina Renee]

Very good freestyle. Well expressed! Thanks for sharing it!

[Jarrett]

Freewrite- I'm a big fan of this sort of writing (that's how the plot for my story "the long road" takes shape)
and I must agree with clockwork. For a spontaneous piece of writing it has quite a bit of depth.
You never seem to disappoint.

[An owl on the moon]

Deeply moving walk along the path of life, so beautifully expressed and vivid in imagery. You capture this exploration so perfectly!

Craig

[Clockwork]

Well for something spontaneous it has great deal of depth and character. I like the formation of the piece. The flowing stanza brings your message home, and assists in making your point. The metaphor you used was very well done. The only thing that I would consider changing is the very last line. I think it takes away from the message of the piece overall. Very nice piece, keep writing-I hope to read more from you in the future.