"I love you"

Those three words...

“I love you” 

Three completely ordinary words 

When strung together 

Is the most powerful tool anyone can possess. 

They cause your heart 

To pump at a rate nothing else can. 

They cause goose bumps 

The size of mountains 

Increasingly rising on the surface of your delicate skin. 

“I love you” 

He whispers into you heart 

Where the words monopolize 

And fill your entire body with a butterfly sensation. 

“I love you” 

He writes on your notebook. 

Your eyes trace every curvature 

Of each letter as to make the moment last forever. 

These three words are so ubiquitous, 

yet together are so electrifying.

Their power melts away all the bad 

That clogs our tainted minds. 

These three words, 

when seen together, 

we wish for them to never part. 

Whenever there is an I, 

There should be a you. 

Whenever there’s a love, 

There needs to be you and I. 

“I love you” he whispers into your heart.

 

“I love you too.”

Reviews

[darkgurl]

Such a remarkable write here. So full of powerful words. We can say I love you andit not mean anything. Sometimes actions speak louder. I like what you have said here.

[J.Black]

Very nice! But I think the words "I love you" are over-rated now. Instrad of saying them, I love to be shown love. Since it is a feeling, not a word.

[The Perfectionist]

you're missing an 'r' in 'your heart' on the fourth line

This feels like more poetry than prose. If you restructured it, cleaned up your English a little, and changed some punctuation, you could get a really strong poem out of this. As a 'story' it's awful, but as what it was intended to be, it's a heartfelt expression that could be worded better, but is certainly passable.

[A.Lee]

Very true. I really liked your style in writing this. It has a very sensual, thoughtful tone. By the time you're finished it makes you really want to hear that special someone whisper "I love you" in your ear. Nice work.

[Chantel]

I like it :)

[*Always be Me:)*]

very nice. i like it :)