Real(ief)

AND another.

It’s when words fail that you know

It’s when a smile or a tear is enough

To show more than words can explain

 

The feeling is wordless

The sensation is blissfully indescribable

The smile is erasable  

 

You beam a bright that’s unseen to the oblivious eye

Yet aware,

It’s as obvious as a blooming rose in a dying garden

 

Striving for natural is when you know

You feel secure in your own skin

It’s a feeling opposite of the chase

 

It’s relief. 

Reviews

[Lorraine]

First off, I want to say that I really like how you title your pieces. I think it's rather clever, using parenthesis and playing with two different words to get your message across. The poem, itself, is something admirable. I really like the words you used; they are simple and goes well with the concept of it. One thing though: in the 3rd stanza, 1st line, "You beam a bright that's unseen..." You beam a bright... what exactly? I think you may be missing a word there. Despite that, the poem is a beautiful piece.

Keep Writing ^___^

[Jeff Bresee]

Short, simple and damn good.

[Cherry Chapstick]

I like how you simply describe relief through sequences and scenarios found in everyday life. I've been here before, and so have a lot of people. I like this poem because I can relate. Thank you for writing this! Great work.

[JenLyn]

Great write! :)

[ashley]

This is a great write. You describe the emotions so well. :D

[Amy Bumpas]

Relief sometimes can be something as simple as a flood of tears.
This is a simple poem, but very deep. I see someone who thinks
a lot here, that doesn't always see what's in front of them.

[deeps]

This is wonderful

[A.Lee]

Nicely written. :)

[Joy Lynn B.]

This is very good!