Loves War Wounds

~ Collaboration by Dagonut and Ray { Not a Poet } ~

Loves War Wounds Rays Verses ************ At first she had great desire Then again,~ she could have been a liar Told me how much she loved me Then again,~ I should have waited to really see   She really had great love for me Then again,~ she could have just used me to get where she wanted to be Does this thing called love really exist Now that it's all over I'm not sure of this Just add another,~ to the hurt me list   Dagonut Verses ************ Giving my heart without reserve Takes more than a little nerve In her palm all it takes is a grip And through her fingers my love drips   I've never gotten my heart back in one piece Former loves keep souvenirs So now it looks like Swiss cheese Paid for with heartache and tears   Rays Verses ************ My heart beaten and used over the years Its enough to bring any man to tears Is there an honest woman,~ left somewhere That wants true love and for me will really care   The heart is a very fragile thing True love is all I wish her to bring I have looked for her from shore to shore To bad you can't buy true love in a store I would buy it before it is to late For soon I won't be able to afford the freight   Dagonut adds ... *************** But love cannot be purchased with A coin, a bill, a gold bar or gem It's priceless and attained only if The person you love, resides within   On the battlefield of love lay remains Of a hundred billion broken hearts Ironically still within them contained Is a singular glowing spark   The puddles formed of their misery Mixed together amongst the debris Who knows, maybe love can arise Amongst the casualties By Dagonut and Ray Hamilton © Copyright 7 / 2008 All rights Reserved   Thank You Goes Out To Dagonut For his Talented Pen In This Fun Write No offence Intended To The Ladies Without You Life Would Be Worth Nothing   Please visit Dagonut He is a very talented poet Click picture

Author's Note

This was written as two men having a conversation back and forth about their lost loves,
I have no idea if this has been done before or not, but its something different { I think }

Reviews

[Michael]

Hi Ray,

I really think you would do better dropping the music. For me, it just gets in the way of the read. I understand others my not agree but there it is.

It is a very good collaboration and now that you have it finished as it where, think about removing the "by lines" internal to it. You each get full credit in my book.

[Legion]

Cool stuff. You two work well together. Kudos.

[David Lewis Paget]

It's an old story, but true for all of us at one point or another in our lives.
Luckily, time heals all wounds. Recently, a woman I spent six years with thirty
years ago in an unhealthy obsession, called by with the new boyfriend -
(the fifth I think, since our demise) - and I looked at her and thought;
'what the hell did I ever see in you in the first place?' She was shallow,
arrogant, and the years had taken her looks. Beauty's only skin deep, fellas,
maybe love is too?
David.

[C.T. Bailey]

My advice...date a stockbroker...and be their biggest investor. I think things would go much smoother. Love the poem. You two were great.
Todd

[The Dark Priest]

This was wonderful! Now I want to go find my partner and put up some collaborated pieces we have done together... Write hard!

[Poetic Injustice]

Love bleeds on ... be gentle. =0)

Kudos.

;0)