My Goddess

Inside of me a burning lust

The moon is full, the tide is high

I’m naked to the core

Salty ocean licks my toes

I, willingly walk in

Neptune’s fluid fingers caress me

Trying to lure me, perhaps?

Only makes me burn, even more

Tonight I aim to sacrifice

What little I have left

 

I hear my voice

As it shouts out

Prayers that sound like questions.

Worship singing like a plea

Salty tears run down my face

I turn to East, I turn to West

I look both North and South

Show me how

Guide me now

I twist and turn around

With gentle arms waves carry me

Back to the glistening shore

 

As I step out

The sky lights up,

A powerful surge,

A lightning strike.

Thor’s hammer is pounding

Now with anger, now with rage…

My body shivers slightly

Mind and spirit remain firm

The sign I craved, for an eternity

Has washed ashore tonight

 

Sacred herbs

I blend together

Lime and eucalyptus

Coffee saturated henna leaf.

I paint my body

Brown and red

My promise, my commitment

 

I speak the sacred words I know

My soul is filled with you.

Author's Note

restored

Reviews

[John Herrin - Determine..]

Dark and lusty. Makes me think of storms and struggles with lovers pregnant with double-meaning. I almost think you could rewrite it without reference to Neptune and Thor. It would have a purely naturalistic flow. Still, the reference to those old gods work and give the poem a very mythological reference point to hang the passion.

[m3lody mae]

Wow! i found this to be dark and kinda erotic, nicely presented

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

What a wonderful description of the tribute you have made. Beautiful imagery and description. Wonderful write. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Gary H]

As someone born and who lived by the sea from nearly half my life I really appreciated this. There is something that lures you into the water that I've felt from time to time - have to say, I'd be waiting to see this goddess enter the murky depths. Superb imagery and really enjoyable.
Funny I read 'my commitment' as my contentment.....

[Drifter]

I love when a poem stirs memories of another time or of someone. Several of my friends follow pagan paths and I myself have studied some religions, though mainly as to understand other cultures. However, I did notice something beautiful, something powerful and peaceful, something tempting yet offering... all combined. Good job.

Drifter

[Rogue Daffodil]

You conjured up a very powerful scene in my mind. These lines were very effective in my opinion:

As I step out
The sky lights up,
A powerful surge,
A lightning strike.
Thor�s hammer is pounding
Now with anger, now with rage�
My body shivers slightly
Mind and spirit remain firm
The sign I craved, for an eternity
Has washed ashore tonight

I loved it. Thank you so much for sharing this moment with us.

[Sea Dreams ~marina~]

Beautiful representation of paganism and the goddess!!
Thanks for sharing!
- M

[Eric]

This is a pagan poem... beautiful... mythic... and full of vaulted images. I especially like the ocean licking your toes. Those kinds of phrases bring our universe to life and breathe life into our poems.

This is well done!

[Robert Luna]

Wow. I really enjoyed this piece. You capture an innocence that can only be experienced by an open spirit and seeking heart. I really loved the way you painted this wonderful image in my mind that I can enjoy for a while longer.


Great Job!!!

[Diane]

I felt myself swung between many different emotions and, underlying everything, I was very aware of the two words 'willingly' and 'sacrifice' - two opposites, or, are they? A poem of strong images masking deep insight.
Diane

[Nathan Strange]

Salty ocean licks my toes

was the line that stood out most for me. This was quite good i must say.

It's a tremendous ryhthm