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Mirror on my wall

Who is fanciest of all?

Make the final call

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Amit]

It remembered me a story.... Thanks for such a short, simple & sweet piece. 

[Ivory]

I love the question it askes.
Simple, yet powerful
really good ; )

[Diane]

A lovely piece of work. From a physical perspective, the similar rhyming syllable at the end of each line, makes the poem continue ad infinitum and, for me, this connects back, so beautifully, to the title. In other words, at what point is 'the final call' made and/or is it ever made? Congratulations!
Diane

[Anata]

Really nice senryu, and i love the way it rhymes!
The question asked in this senryu is one we often ponder about, and your answer, make the final call, well is often forgotten. People tend not to see their own beauty and focus on the beauty of others. To me you state here, open your eyes and see who you are, embrace all the beauty inside and outside.
really nice work!

[Drunkindruid]

I smiled when I read this. Mind you I would'nt ask, might not like the answer. Anyway enjoyed it.

[Jasmina Amethyst Pendra..]

Hmm...interesting. If only we could step through the looking glass and discover our true selves. Let's face it...the mirror can sometimes lie about what is truly there. Good write. ~Liv

[Luna Tique Fringe]

I like it. It makes me wonder what brought about the question, all kinds of senarios come to mind. Well done. Perfect form.

[Jacques Coulardeau]

And get across the mirror on the other side where there is nothing at all except a door on which you can knock forever and disappear finally in the final draft that will blow in and out, through and through, when the door finally opens on this very final call. And that is I hope and I guess final.
Jacques

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I have not tried a senyru.. or much of anything in that vien.
This is a deep senyru in my opinion, alot of meaning in three sentences.

Chloe
xoxo

[Sea Dreams ~marina~]

This is one of the most profound things I've read in a while. And i love this genre'. Sometimes the random thoughts that enter our minds are the ones that make the best poetry. Well done, darling.
- M