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My man is in love with Mary Jane.

She is so hot when she calls his name

 

He runs for miles just to catch a glance

I know with her he will dance the last dance

 

She is his one love, and always will be

Sadly I know this, it will never be me

 

He courted her young, she stole his heart

As he grew up, he knew they never would part

 

She laughs in his face when he asks for more

He thinks she’s a lady, when in fact she’s a w***e

 

He used to be open and show her off

Seemed surprised when I began to cough

 

Since then he began his affair with her

Hides in his shed, to not cause a stir

 

But I always know when her love he sips

I can smell her sweet perfume on his lips

 

It saddens my heart and turns me away

From my one love I have begun to sway

 

I don’t want to be a woman cheated upon

But he leaves me no choice, soon I will be gone.

 

Author's Note

restored

Reviews

[Eric]

You are clever. Very, very clever. And I could have used 23 more "clevers" before thinking about stopping. I hope this isn't the same person you've written about in your other pieces. If so, you have quite the delima on your hands.

Good luck with that.

[Will Welch]

A fun read, your rhyming is sweet and clever. The story is sad, but it makes me kind of giggle.

[Robert Luna]

I loved the playfulness of your words and rhymes. You put a smile on my face with this one as I visualized the images that you displayed so perfectly. I loved it.


Wonderful Job!!!

[Dice Rosenthal]

= ( God, sad! Yes, it's a bit of a ramble, but I still like this, the images you use and the way it seems that the person writng this is is just giving up and giveing in.

[Celtic Cat]

How sad.