You

Your hand lies lifeless on the edge of the bed,

last night was no dream at all.

Your smooth skin so delicately fresh

and yet,

you are so still, so statuesque.

 

I look away for a moment

feeling blinded by your beauty,

robbed by un-innocent thoughts,

which are rampaging through me,

as I yearn to touch the soft skin

between your fingers

with my shivering lips.

 

Each inch of your body is

so perfectly placed and

reveals no hint of awkwardness

or being late for anything.

No suspicion of stumbling,

fumbling or almost falling down the stairs.

 

This moment is pure perfection,

not even sleep appears to have

ruffled your immaculate strands of hair.

Your body, deliciously soft,

with a smoothness far beyond silk,

breathes with sweet, silent breaths.

 

I stand above you,

watching as if I were your

personal guardian angel,

and yet,

I feel inadequate for the task at hand.

The world would melt to see you now,

so beautiful on your pedestal of sleep.

Author's Note

restored

Reviews

[Dice Rosenthal]

I look away for a moment
feeling blinded by your beauty,
robbed by un-innocent thoughts,
which, are rampaging through me,
as I yearn to touch the soft skin
between your fingers,
with my shivering lips. "

Wow. Those lines are so intimate! I feel like i'm sneaking a peek into someone innermost thoughs, which I guess is your goal. My goddess, great job here! Really. And I love the way your so insecure about your own beauty, wondering if your good enough. Adn the way you raise the lover on a "Pedastal", is beautiful. Lovely. One thing though...I felt soemthing way missing at the end, like you hadn't said all you wanted to say...like maybe you wanted to say "I love you" or something like that. but it's not taking away from my rating! lol 5 stars =D

[angel]

I admit to being a bit confused; is she alive, and sleeping for now, or dead, and sleeping forever?

[Anwar]

The words wrap around your affection and love for the person before you. I was drawn epsecially to: Each inch of your body is so perfectly placed and reveals no hint of awkwardness. Just love the way these words feel as if they have been 'jigsawed' together in a way that completes the picture. I imagine you enjoyed putting in the final piece of this poetry puzzle. Wonderful. Anwar

[Diane]

So many wonderful images and emotions, all conveying the overwhelming beauty of a child sleeping and the parent's feeling of inadequacy. With words, you have sketched the child's innocent beauty so well that I, as the reader, feel that I can almost reach out and touch him or her while at the same time, like you, I am so aware of the responsibility entrusted me. An unusually moving poem about the very essence of love. Thank you for sharing it.
Diane

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is an intriguing piece so full of passion and promise.Great Job of laying your emotions out the page. Very nicely done. I would make one change, I would take the word lifeless out of the first stanza. The flow is not very smooth but that is an easy fix. Great Job.
Debby

[Robert Luna]

Sorry took so long to review computer issues and site issues.

This was beautiful and such a wonderful read. You captured one of the hardest things in my opinion to write about LOVE and really made me feel you emotions and passion. Which is such a wonderful treat.


Beautifully written and flowingly perfect

[Raven Held]

There is some real pure and genuine authenticity in your writing! So innocent and so chaste, and that reminds me of untrodden snow. Your writing is delicate and shows real love emanated from the persona.

Very nice. Thanks for sharing!

[R J Askew]

cracking. beautiful. such a private moment of sensuousness observed. with the added twist of the observers reticence. loved last line, makes me see something by michaelangelo. melting here.

[Tai Chi Italy]

Wow! Now that is what I call adoring your woman in all her glory. A great poem, I loved it. Smiling at your romantic heart, and of course you can do it. She was obviously meant to be your dream come true. Tai

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

V this is beautiful...
I am not sure if the person is your love or someone you wish were ,, i love this part of this poem

I stand above you,
watching as if I were your
personal guardian angel,
and yet,
I feel inadequate for the task at hand.
The world would melt to see you now,
so beautiful on your pedestal of sleep

Especially the lines.. The world would melt to see you now, so beautiful on your pedestal of sleep.

This is beautiful poem of love .

Chloe
xoxo

[Celtic Cat]

Very very cool definition of love. What a great rhythm this had...very lovely tribute!!!
Just beautiful.