SHE

Dark is this place in which her mind resides
Sometimes she thinks of suicide 
In her darkest hour…she opens her eyes
Drip, drop, drip, drop goes the blood
Thru her knife cut…goes the blood
Marked wrists look like blood beasts
On clouds of smoke…up in the sky
She fly high
Howkus Powkus here comes the pain
She cant focus
Sometimes trains are comin’ at her
But sometimes snakes are bitin’ at her
Burnin’ in this sea of fire, yet she feels like she’s flyin’
She was suppose to be the girl soldier
What happened? She lost her composure
Dark is this place in which her mind resides
She once had a momma and a daddy
And she never thought about dyin’
But now the thoughts of self murder…they never end
Her bad habits…they never bend
She’s so sick but she wont quit
Tears shed down her face
But salty water don’t wash the pain away
She turns to her white friends
Once again…
Thinkin’ they can help
Needles, needles
Sharp needles…
Up in the blood veins….deep in the brain cells
Yes indeed! She can see them now
People from the past and people from the now
Roaches and demons explode like dynamite in her head
Yes, yes! She is now insane!
She can see hell…and the devil as well
Is she dyin’?
She’s in a wooden box with flowers but nobody’s cryin’
Could it be so possibly…that she…
Is me?

Reviews

[misha]

Great write. This was tragic and heartbreaking.

[EMMIE]

Thank you :)

[Preciosasantiago]

This is well written...I enjoyed every word!!!

[EMMIE]

Thank you

[Tree]

Powerful. Well written. The tension you create is off the charts. Then you give the reader the twist in the last stanza, threw me off. I would love to hear this one out loud.

[EMMIE]

Thank you so much, Diego

[BLACK PRINCE]

VERY MYSTERIOUS POEM.

[Praiser]

Very compelling insights of darkness that shares the truth of someone you don`t know is going through this, very fresh to be a story, or Tv show call she

[Melinda Weber]

Gorgeous flow, I love to write dark, even more so read dark work :) Loved reading this, thanks :)

[J.A. Stevens]

very well done! dark but poingant, forboding fresh factual and fantastic i loved it you have a great voice thanks for sharing you work

[Coffee Vampier]

Wow Dark but very powerful in the emotional connection to the story :)

[Lucia Morgan]

I absolutely love this. it is so original and it is effective and full of talent! I couldn't stop reading, no cliches, you expressed yourself/theg feeing/ scene so effortlessly and with ease, even though it is dark and, i personally believe, overdone subject.

WELL DONE!

[Light and ashes]

Wow a fantastic and compelling write. The end was especially gripping. I've been through similar hell in my own mind also, thought of self harm but I knew that it wouldn't help me only add to my pain. Also some of the poems that I read about self harming were a big part of the reason that I didn't. I am so glad that I didn't do it. So glad that I was able to save myself from more torture.