The Sweeping Beauty

The brick house 

What a sight to see 

So eloquent and peaceful

Strong and standing tall 

A beauty on the outside  

Rotting on the inside 

Dirt to the ceiling 

And the Sweeping Beauty 

 

Sweeps the dirt 

Right under the rug 

No one would see 

Under the rug 

Sweeping Beauty 

Locks the snakes 

In the room with no windows 

Sweeps the broken glass 

In an isolated corner 

Fills the empty fruit basket 

With plastic apples and oranges 

And when the beautiful brick house 

Starts to rot again 

She repeats the cycle 

The Sweeping beauty 

Have you been to her house

Are you there now

I am 

Reviews

[biggerthenu]

You killing it. Sweeping beauty Lol great job. It's about time for all of us to start cleaning house. Or at least. Dig a little deeper before you cop a squat. Loved it

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

This reminds me of my Irish mother-in-law who used to say, "Don't air your dirty laundry for the neighbors to see." One never knows what truly goes on behind closed doors. Well done, poet!

[EMMIE]

Thank you so much!

[Coffee Vampier]

At least we've got a clean house-

Sweep me off my feet

[Cherrie]

this poem could stand a part two, with a 2nd voice calling her to wake, from this daze and be bold to throw open the windows to this old home.

[EMMIE]

Thank you!

[Insight "MH"]

In my opinion, this poem talks about a down to earth beautiful woman living with a bad family and even though they are rotten, she seems to be loyal to them and tries to cover up their mess, in short, she is a good person in a bad place. Thank you for sharing.

[EMMIE]

Awesome interpretation! Thank you.

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Kinda of chilling :) i like it though. It's a good kind of chilling!

[EMMIE]

Thank you!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome!

[Woody]

this is anything but depressing. very well penned indeed and the message is clear. try to cover up the rotting inside so the ouside may appear bright (with a smile?)
is this Cinderella by any chance?

[EMMIE]

Thank you! You know, I haven't even thought of Cinderella, this is an interesting take on it. I really don't know what I was thinking when this came to me because I never really have a thought process when I write. I can see how this relates though.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice tale shared in the poetry.
"Have you been to her house
Are you there now
I am "
I liked the above lines. I liked the feel of mystery and wonder. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[EMMIE]

Thank you for your kind reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Emmie.

[Avinash]

This one gave very little but left a lot to explore in some simple words.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

These words got to me. They made me uncomfortable as the scenery playing out in my mind was all too real. I saw too much to read on without feeling fear and anxiety, but I couldnt look away. It was strange how calm the sweeping beauty seemed to be. I cant even imagine what would be said if these walls could talk. This is powerful work. I was taken in and entirely enveloped by sights and sounds of this house.

[EMMIE]

Thank you so much for taking the time and really feeling it =)