THE BUSH

This poem means whatever you think it means. There's no wrong, there's no wright. The beauty of poetry is in it's simple mystery.

Persecuted by their own kind
Black berries
Used to thrive together into one bush
But then some of them became rotten
Made so sour by the absence of good care
Made so bitter by those bugs
Sucking up the sweetness
And injecting poison instead
The darker the berry the bitter the juice
Oh, those rotten berries!
Running all the good berries away
Forcing them to flee their bush
To grow on grounds foreign and unfamiliar to them
Many good berries never even make it out the bush
They just fall and lay in darkness
Until they are no more
Poor sweet black berries
Being rotten by the bitters
Persecuted by their own kind

Reviews

[Inci 2]

Nice. I dont know but i thought you were talking about racism here . nice use of metaphors. great poem

[EMMIE]

There's no opinion that is wrong, it's whatever you see 😉 thank you so much for taking the time!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Very intelligent execution of metaphor

I think that the word choices are impeccable and you’ve taken a familiar idea and described it in a way that seems fresh.

[rockgirl]

Nicely done. I love the blackberries around my house. Good to see it from a different view.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A descriptive piece examining nature at her most finest, well done, good read.

[EMMIE]

Thank you!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

your welcome.

[Haunzwürthe]

Finally getting around to my read requests and this is the reason I've missed being on here. It's such a simple focal point, the blackberries and their maturation cycle, and present an entirely new perspective which nobody expects. Awesome, awesome, awesome.

[EMMIE]

Thank you, thank you, thank you! Lol

[Heromen Selena]

That was pretty deep for it only having the black berries as a comparison. But then again, maybe that's why you only used black berries ;) Whatever the reason it was a good idea and made the reader image his or her view of it which is sort of awesome :) I admire how you make simple things into very complex situations, but still keep the simplicity of the beginning analogy. Very creative and excellent poem. Great job :)

[M.E.Lyle]

Sounds like a tale from the cyber world. I liked it. It provokes ones mind to think a bit.

[EMMIE]

My life long goal is to make you think lol thanks for reading.

[Tinasha LaRayé]

what a creative poem. It can truly mean so many things. You make it so the reader can use this poem as a mirror and a launching pad of conversation with themselves...what do I see? and what about me makes me see that? we all have different stories - and yet they are all very much the same.

Fabulous!

[EMMIE]

Truth! Thank you much!

[MandaBear]

I found this very interesting to read. I read it over and over because I liked it so much. Great job!

[EMMIE]

Thaaaaaank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

[kublakhan27]

The potential for metaphors is almost endless here. I like this one very much, for it does encourage interpretation while still maintaining a fairly firm message. Well done Emmie :)

[EMMIE]

Oh it's a metaphoric poem alright lol, thanks for reading