the Girl is Beautiful

lovely to pain
she is pure
like filtered water
from the tap

sweet sweet kisses
and a voice like love
she crushes my heart with her absence

Reviews

[Sam Severn]

This reads like a mystery, where I'm the detective trying to put together the puzzle with just a few dropped clues. Your verse is like a candy trail I'm following into the forest. When it disappears, my curious heart wants to keep following. My heart wants to know more n' feel more.

It took you only 27 words to paint a whole world. That's some powerful magic! ㋡

[Alex Zynder]

add some more to this! i feel like it could go further.

[shayne]

there's so much you can do with so little words! great job!

[Haifa]

short but lovely.

[Frantzuu]

short but powerful, your word choice is excelent here, and the emotions are out there, great poem :D

[Katie Louise Hughes]

awwwww :)))